The sentence structure is consistently strong throughout the essay, and evident in each paragraph. The student connects the paragraphs to the prompt, clearly showing the impact that the experience at this restaurant has had on the student’s life.
This student was placed in ENL 111: Composition I Write about a sport, hobby, or extra-curricular activity that you were involved with in high school and the impact that sport or activity had on your life. Your anciaty gives you speek and strength when you get on the mat. The last difficultie is physical pain and edurance. Your mind is whats telling you it hurts and you need to stop. This teacies you the more important thing which is you can do anything if you beleive you can.
The first sample essay demonstrates a readiness for Composition I (a writing course required in all degree programs).
The second contains weak areas demonstrating a lack of readiness for Composition I.
“From cycle year 2019-2020 forward, Wharton and Engineering will no longer accept external junior transfers.
The College and Nursing will continue to accept junior transfers…We have made this change in consultation with our academic partners across campus.Be sure to clearly identify the sport or activity, and use specific details about how this involvement made an impact on your life. The activity I will be writing about is highschool wrestling. The reason I chose it was because I herd it had good rewards. Those are some of the Difficulties and lessens you learn from wrestling. I will be writing to you about the difficulties, rewards, experience, all what I learned from challenges. The one major difficulty for most people is eating. One hobby or skill I pride myself in is my ability to cook, one that I have only obtained in my last 2 years working as a cook.When I started at Rotelli (an Italian restaurant in State College) it was right after my senior year in High school.The development of ideas occurs in each paragraph because the student writes about how the experience at this restaurant has impacted the student at the restaurant and the possible impact on the student’s future. While there are some errors in punctuation, there are significant problems with sentence structure throughout the essay, especially with grammar, word choice, and spelling. There are some minor errors in punctuation, word choice, and spelling, but they do not take away from the reader’s ability to understand the paragraphs individually and the essay as a whole. Penn College faculty evaluate essays based on the following: Write about a sport, hobby, or extra-curricular activity that you were involved with in high school and the impact that sport or activity had on your life.Be sure to clearly identify the sport or activity, and use specific details how this involvement made an impact on your life.The curricular pre-requisites for transferring into Wharton or Engineering as a junior are both specific and extensive.As we reviewed Wharton and Engineering transfer applicants, we consistently saw that most applicants were unable to take the coursework necessary for a seamless transition into these schools.